Never would I thought that I will find such
Oasis of my desert, I wouldn't wish for much
Everytime our eyes meet,
Lessens my fears, my tears, my doubts
Efforts to know her, do you think its easy?
Defer other thoughts, to at least make her know me
Embrace to comfort her, I'll do
Not a day I'll tell her what's not true
In my heart she'll always be there
Amaranth it would, and will always be
Listen, it beats fast I feel
Empyreal may it be but how I wish it's for real
Right before my eyes,
Everything seems so nice
Forever may not be enough, but
In due time the whole world I'll shout that,
Nevertheless, I do like her
Nevertheless, I may love her
Empty, that's what I don't want to be
Just wait and see, I'll make her fall in love with me
Oasis of my desert, I wouldn't wish for much
Everytime our eyes meet,
Lessens my fears, my tears, my doubts
Efforts to know her, do you think its easy?
Defer other thoughts, to at least make her know me
Embrace to comfort her, I'll do
Not a day I'll tell her what's not true
In my heart she'll always be there
Amaranth it would, and will always be
Listen, it beats fast I feel
Empyreal may it be but how I wish it's for real
Right before my eyes,
Everything seems so nice
Forever may not be enough, but
In due time the whole world I'll shout that,
Nevertheless, I do like her
Nevertheless, I may love her
Empty, that's what I don't want to be
Just wait and see, I'll make her fall in love with me
5 comments:
arts, obyus... gumagawa ka pala ng ganyan ahh. ahahaha. tarush.
Never would I think nga pala... mali yung thought... and err... sorry but I lack words, what does Empyreal mean? ...when I first read it I though t'was Ephemeral but it wasn't... LOL... and err you don't put periods in poems :3
*critic*
I'll add your link in my blog. Oh and gomene, you forgot to logout, I accidentally commented on Jen's page with your ID.
Poems are supposed to be written in freestyle. It may or it may not have to follow some guidelines for as long as you can fully express yourself in that poem... btw, empyreal means "heavenly"...
poems are poems, and yes they are written in freestyle so now I ask, is that the same as saying that what you did is not a poem? are those three periods a part of your style? and how about the wrong grammar in the first line? Is that your style as well?
grammar dude. you're a writer after all... and there really are no periods in a poem don't tell me that those three dots are a figure of your so-called expression?
you don't have to be too defensive when someone criticizes you... you could've atleast admitted some parts but well...
anyway.
ahh I see, I now have a new word to add in my vocabulary :3
Ayan, tinanggal ko na po yung periods... cool ka lang!!! hehehehe...
wow.. batang talentado.. =D..
Like your style by the way.. 'empyreal'.. did you know that I found out the meaning of this word just a few months ago.. huhuhuhu.. so much for being a self-proclaimed 'poet' and aspiring novelist..
hehehe.. I'll steal your link aa..=p
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